momebie: (Architect William)
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Original fiction.
~1000 words.



“We crossed swords the first night we met,” Edmund says. His mask is resting on the top of his head, curved beak pointing up toward the chandelier and making it look, from William's seated angle, like he is hanging from it. Edmund is the only person who feels at ease enough in the Henley family home to have taken his mask off. William suspects it's because Edmund has no airs, no sense of propriety, and no wish to make a name for himself. All admirable qualities for someone of new money.

At Edmund's words most of the women are smiling coyly behind their gloved hands or decorated fans. Standing around William there are masked men and women decorated in laces, silks, and fine brocades collected from traders on the Chinois border. After all, when Grand Dame Henley requests your presence in her home dressed to please royalty and masked to complete espionage, you comply and you do not stray from script. William is just pleased to see his peers taking some interest in what they wear, since the new fashions do nothing but make the women look mannish and the men look less so.

“He does mean steel, ladies,” William says, self-consciously adjusting his crisp, black lace cravat. “I'm afraid you'll find no tawdry penny dreadful affairs here.” At that the men are laughing and William lets himself relax. He's just about to remove his own mask when a heavy hand falls on his shoulder.

“I trust you're keeping my mother's guests well entertained, Mr. Wilson.”

A frisson runs through the group, as if someone has suddenly pulled the marionette strings of polite society tight. William looks over the high, winged back of the chair to see that there's a man behind him dressed in bright red with a simple, black cloth mask tied about his head. It covers his face from his brows to his nose. He's directing his question at Edmund, but he doesn't release William's shoulder. This must be the Mr. Henley that Edmund invited him to meet.

“It is what you're paying me for, sir,” Edmund says, and gives a mock bow.

“Much appreciated.” Mr. Henly looks down at William. “You won't mind if I steal Mr. Claxton away for a moment, will you? I do believe this is his first time in our home and mother will want to meet him.”

“Be my guest,” Edmund says. The group chuckles politely.

Sycophants, William thinks.

“Mr. Claxton,” Mr. Henley squeezes William's shoulder briefly before letting it go. He turns and exits the parlor without any other instruction to William, who stands, collects his cane, and hurries after him.

Mr. Henley weaves through the other guests, not acknowledging their presence, though William notes that every one of them gives him the courtesy of stopping their conversations and nodding as he goes by. William keeps an eye out for Dame Henley, not wanting to be startled into doing something embarrassing. He does not see her anywhere. Mr. Henley takes a turn down a dimmed hallway and by the time William reaches the head of it he has disappeared.

William pauses, not knowing what to do. “Mr. Henley,” he calls. When he receives no answer he starts down the corridor, looking into the open doors as he goes. As he passes the last door there's a noise behind him and he swings around, arching his arm and bringing his cane up to eye level just in time to block Mr. Henley's hands as they come down toward him, bringing a heavy vase with them. When William's cane makes contact with Mr. Henley's wrists he drops the vase. William watches it bounce once on the thickly padded rug and crack from lip to base.

"I trust no one will miss that," he says.

“You are fast.” Mr. Henley admires the vase between them, lightly rubbing his right wrist. “Edmund mentioned that you were a better swordsman than he was, but I hardly believed it.”

William lowers his cane, clutching it tightly in his fist. He can feel his cheeks flushing. “That's hardly a matter of distinction. Edmund Wilson has the the worst form of any saber fighter who has ever lived.”

“You have to admit, he gets results.” Mr. Henley reaches up and unties the knot at the back of his mask, pulling the thin, black fabric away from his face. "Jon Henley," he says.

“I know who you are," William says, a tinge of disdain hiding a tremor in his voice. He will not be made to look foolish at the hands of a man whose family are not his betters. "If you don't mind my asking, Mr. Henley, is there a reason you have just tried to kill me, or am I free to go?”

“I had to make sure you were going to be useful." Jon holds his hand out, palm flat. "Your mask please.”

Ludicrous. “What?”

“Remove your mask,” Jon says. “This meeting has already exceeded my taste for theatrics and I have rounds to make among the guests.”

William does as he's told, tugging at the silk ribbon with his free hand. When the mask loosens he pulls it away and places it in Jon's open hand. Relieved of his mask, William can take in both Jon and the wide hallway. Jon looks smaller than William had previously thought him, not nearly as intimidating as the rumours about him would suggest.

Jon stares at William for a moment, summing him up. “Do you ever feel as though you've been rendered obsolete?”

“What do you mean, sir?”

“The way you dress and the way you carry yourself. You are positioning yourself as one of the ineffectual elite. You've carved a niche for yourself in dandyism and now that niche threatens to break open, leaving you exposed. If you are not careful, Mr. Claxton, you are going to slip through and be left behind.”

“With all due respect,” William says. “I find my niche as comfortable as any that has presented itself to me. Is there a point to this, Mr. Henley?”

A slow smile cuts its way across Jon's face and William feels that tension again. This time it's inside of him, threatening to split him open. He suddenly feels as though he's standing at one of history's ledges. Does he jump, or does reach back and depend on the strength of a thin branch that could drop him at any time.

“Mr. Claxton,” Jon says finally. “How do you feel about overthrowing the monarchy?”


This bit of back story for the steampunk universe was written (with apologies to [livejournal.com profile] theemdash and to the Tom Bridgeman rolling his eyes in my head) for topic 14: Cracks at [livejournal.com profile] therealljidol. All comments and questions are welcome.
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Date: 2011-02-18 02:30 am (UTC)
theemdash: (Steampunk Gerard)
From: [personal profile] theemdash
I have to say, I always love your take on Jon. ♥

Also, I'm going to make love to this sentence all night: A frisson runs through the group, as if someone has suddenly pulled the marionette strings of polite society tight.

Date: 2011-02-18 02:40 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (architect amelia)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
WELL THAT WAS FAST. I hope you didn't read it till after I got all the SPAG things fixed. :p Sorry, I had put it up locked to take care of those not thinking anyone would get to it this quickly. Heh. YOU GET A PRIZE. THAT PRIZE IS MISUSE OF THE WORD 'YOU'RE'.

Tom feels that Jon's behavior is entirely ridiculous. He refused to be the one who hit William over the head with a vase.

Please make sure to call the sentence by Sunday and remind it that you really do like it, baby, but you're just in different places in your lives and you hope it finds someone who appreciates it for who it is. ♥
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Date: 2011-02-18 03:17 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] matthewbowers.livejournal.com
hbsjlfhegweluygfulwy this is fantastic. The descriptive details are just right -- not too much, not too few -- and the dialogue sings. I love it.

Date: 2011-02-18 03:34 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (MCR Frank OMG)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
YOU GET TO WRITE THE BLURBS FOR ALL MY BOOKS. I'M INVENTING A FONT JUST FOR YOOOOOOU. It has to be something that's reminiscent of lazer stairs. Do you think by the time I actually write something worth publishing they'll have figured out how to embed LEDs in book jackets?

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Date: 2011-02-18 03:35 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kyasuriin.livejournal.com

ooooh. This has all kinds of intrigue written all over it!
*grabby hands*

Date: 2011-02-18 03:50 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (Inception JGL/Tom fight)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
Intrigue! And adventure! And cravats! What more does a girl need?

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Date: 2011-02-18 02:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] paper-tzipporah.livejournal.com
I LOVE THIS TO TINY LITTLE PIECES

Date: 2011-02-18 03:35 pm (UTC)
ext_289215: (Being Human George/Mitchell cuddles)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
Why thank you, madame.

Date: 2011-02-19 02:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] earlofcardigans.livejournal.com
yup. still amazing.

Date: 2011-02-19 04:36 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (Inception Suitporn)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
YOU'RE still amazing! Thank you for talking me off my ledge. ♥

Date: 2011-02-19 04:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lady-ganesh.livejournal.com
Sign me up!

Date: 2011-02-19 04:37 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (Doctor Who Eleven ties)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
On this line please. Don't worry, we don't take blood signatures until your second month.

Date: 2011-02-19 09:01 pm (UTC)
yachiru: (and then I was like hahahah i ate your)
From: [personal profile] yachiru
Reminds me of Ellen Kushner in the very best of ways. ^^

Date: 2011-02-19 09:03 pm (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
I haven't read any Ellen Kushner. I'll have to look her up! Thank you.

Date: 2011-02-19 11:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] myrna-bird.livejournal.com
I rather like this period piece.

Date: 2011-02-20 05:31 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
Thank you. I have a ridiculous Thing for periods. Gives me an excuse to roll around in research and pictures of people in period dress.

Date: 2011-02-20 01:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] liret.livejournal.com
I would definitely read more of this.

Date: 2011-02-20 05:32 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
Thank you! In unrelated news: OH MY GOD YOU'RE ICON IS THAT PICTURE OF MARK TWAIN AND TESLA. ♥ ♥ ♥

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A fascinating piece...

Date: 2011-02-20 05:29 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ellakite.livejournal.com
I didn't know it was supposed to be steampunk until I saw your note at the end; it could just as easily have been a Jabobean tale.

Nicely done.

Re: A fascinating piece...

Date: 2011-02-20 05:36 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
Hah, yes. This bit didn't really have any sort of tech or doodads or anything in it. It's just part of a larger universe we're working on that does. We don't have a name for it right now so we simply call it The Steampunk. I can definitely see the Jacobean vibe in it, though.

Thank you.

Date: 2011-02-20 02:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lawchicky.livejournal.com
Very cool :)

Date: 2011-02-20 05:03 pm (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2011-02-21 12:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dizzy-writing.livejournal.com
Ooooo, I really love this :) As I read it scenes played through my head as a kind of motion comic all done in sepia and brass :D

Date: 2011-02-21 01:23 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
That's kind of how I see it in my head too! But that's possibly because most things play out as motion comics in my head. I really need to learn how to script comics.

Thank you! ♥

Date: 2011-02-21 01:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] team-jessie.livejournal.com
I was picturing something out of Dangerous Liasons as I read this. Awesome!

Date: 2011-02-21 03:06 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
I had to go look that up since I've never seen it, but oh man, yes. Also, John Malkovich, please sit down on chaises like that FOREVER.

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Date: 2011-02-21 02:14 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] imafarmgirl.livejournal.com
Nice story. It left me willing to read more.

Date: 2011-02-21 03:12 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
That's wonderful to hear, thank you.

Date: 2011-02-21 03:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] comedychick.livejournal.com
I have a bit of a thing for the masks :D

Date: 2011-02-21 03:44 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
You and me both. ♥

Date: 2011-02-21 05:54 am (UTC)
admiral: gwendolyn → odin sphere (→ knowledge is power)
From: [personal profile] admiral
Late comment is late, but I just wanted to let you know how I squee'd over this. So intriguing. ♥

Date: 2011-02-21 07:10 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (Ouran Tamaki/Kyouya pinky swear)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
Thank you hon. It makes me a bit flaily that people seem to like it.

Date: 2011-02-21 02:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xo-kizzy-xo.livejournal.com
I'm generally not one for period pieces, but you've got me so intrigued that I really do want to read more!

Besides, I appreciate steampunk ;)

Date: 2011-02-21 03:30 pm (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
There is an awful lot about steampunk to appreciate. ♥ This bit was light on gadgets and things, so I'm glad that there were parts of it you enjoyed. Thank you.
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Date: 2011-02-21 06:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] roina-arwen.livejournal.com
Very intriguing and well written. Good luck this week!

Date: 2011-02-21 06:17 pm (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
Thank you, and good luck to you as well! I've never been through a round like this, so I'm pretty nervous about it. But I think if I have to go out on a post, this is a good one to do it on.

Date: 2011-02-21 11:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tigrkittn.livejournal.com
Overthrowing the monarchy? Don't mind if I do! This was great fun - is this the first of this story you've posted or did I miss it somehow?

Date: 2011-02-22 04:30 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
Please sign on this line here and report at 0600 hours to claim your pocket watch and injections. Thank you!

I am pretty sure that this entry (http://momebie.livejournal.com/762537.html) is the only other thing I've posted for the competition that's set in this universe. It's not really tied to this one, since it's set after the story I'm working on and this is set before. It also focuses on different characters.

Date: 2011-02-22 12:01 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] snarkerdoodle.livejournal.com
I love the casual matter-of-factness of the last line. It reads like you'd ask someone how they felt about potatoes for dinner or something, but is just a great ending to the feel of the piece, etc. Loved it!

Date: 2011-02-22 04:32 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
Ha. You can call Jon Henley anything you like, just don't call him late for a revolution!

Thank you very much, dear.

Date: 2011-02-22 04:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkertxkitty.livejournal.com
Well written, nicely paced. I love the subtle steamy aspects running through it. It could be any monarchy and any rebellion, but you made it the reader's problem too. Love it.

Date: 2011-02-22 04:26 pm (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
Thank you much, ma'am. The revolution itself, when it happens, is based on several different historical events, but there's a looooot of the French Revolution in it. I'm blaming Orczy.

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Date: 2011-02-22 08:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] locknkey.livejournal.com
Really liked this line, since the new fashions do nothing but make the women look mannish and the men look less so. . very visual and pulled me right into the moment. :)

Date: 2011-02-22 04:27 pm (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
I'm really glad that line works for you. You never know, sometimes, whether things will be a help or a hindrance. Thank you. :)

Date: 2011-02-22 11:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mstrobel.livejournal.com
Lovely setting! I really enjoyed this :D I want a bookful!

Date: 2011-02-22 04:28 pm (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'm excited that you said that. It makes me feel like the actual book full of it that I'm working on will come out okay.

Date: 2011-02-22 07:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wyliekat.livejournal.com
Intriguing, in the purest sense of the term. ;-}

Date: 2011-02-22 08:23 pm (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
I have a soft spot for dandies who find themselves wrapped up in Secret Plans! Thank you. :)

Date: 2011-02-22 09:07 pm (UTC)
connie: (Default)
From: [personal profile] connie
This was wonderfully vivid. I could see the whole thing playing out in front of me as I read, and you definitely left me hanging at the end! Well done!

Date: 2011-02-23 05:34 am (UTC)
ext_289215: (Default)
From: [identity profile] momebie.livejournal.com
Thank you very much. ♥
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