It's okay! Brusque crits never do upset me, and I totally understand about date night. I appreciate that you stopped by. I also hope date night went well. ♥
Most of the things you pointed out would eventually be re-worded if I decided to take this anywhere. Especially the stepping and mis-stepping, which I know sounds incredibly awkward, I just couldn't brain a way to make it better at that point in time. Writing at work presents special challenges sometimes. ;) I am glad that you went through and pulled them like that, though. Thank you for taking the time on this silly little thing.
I am glad that it sounds convincingly dated AND that Danvers comes off okay as a character. I quite like the idea of writing blustering, indignant gentlemen. There's a bit of a space ship captain I'm currently writing into another story in Danvers.
And I am almost SURE that opiatic isn't a word! I just keep using it! Maybe one day I will make it a word through sheer force of will.
Thanks again for stopping by. I'm enjoying the comm you've put together and I'm excited to see what else is to come.
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Date: 2012-03-02 02:40 pm (UTC)Most of the things you pointed out would eventually be re-worded if I decided to take this anywhere. Especially the stepping and mis-stepping, which I know sounds incredibly awkward, I just couldn't brain a way to make it better at that point in time. Writing at work presents special challenges sometimes. ;) I am glad that you went through and pulled them like that, though. Thank you for taking the time on this silly little thing.
I am glad that it sounds convincingly dated AND that Danvers comes off okay as a character. I quite like the idea of writing blustering, indignant gentlemen. There's a bit of a space ship captain I'm currently writing into another story in Danvers.
And I am almost SURE that opiatic isn't a word! I just keep using it! Maybe one day I will make it a word through sheer force of will.
Thanks again for stopping by. I'm enjoying the comm you've put together and I'm excited to see what else is to come.